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In response to instructions to write a short paragraph that develops a statement with specific example, Noelle Mendoza chose the following sentence from her paragraph on the legacy of 9/11 as an example of how to populate prose using human subjects and actions verbs to focus her writing.
From The Legacy of 9/11 by Noelle Mendoza On one occasion, my father, a Mexican man with tanned skin and a large beard, was pulled aside by the airport police merely because of his physical appearance. In response to the prompt, write one paragraph that develops the statement--The legacy of 9/11 still haunts America--the Teal Team selected the following sentence as an illustration of their ability to write populated prose i.e. focused sentences with human subjects and action verbs.
From The Day Grandma's Heart Broke by Lashon'taneise Butler, Dalelesha Crawford, and Zoey Phillips We are haunted by the way our world, instead of becoming more united, has grown farther apart; the event broke a lot of hearts and sadly my grandma's was one of them. Not only does Nicky write an excellent extended definition of the word friend but also incorporates more than the three requisite noun clauses required by the assignment.
Friend By Nicky Taylor A friend is a person with whom you maintain close relations. This word originated from Old English; however, what the dictionary states is not necessarily the real life definition of a friend. What a person does will show you if he or she is a true friend or not. Whoever lies to you, is mean to you, or lets you down is not a true friend. In the end, a friend is a bridge to help you over the turbulent river of life. In response to the expository writing prompt to write an extended definition of the word friend, Eric Taylor does and excellent job. She also includes more than the requisite three noun clauses, which extend her clauses and make her sentence structure more complex. Bravo!
Friend By Erin Taylor A friend. A friend is a person who is not an enemy. This is the definition that the dictionary gives you, but is that an accurate definition of the word friend? Different people interpret the word “friend” different ways. I think a friend is someone who is always there for you anytime you need them. A friend is a person who tells you that everything is going to be okay and not to worry. A friend always has your back in any situation. A friend is a lifeline. Yes, friends can be or do all of these things, but I still don’t believe that the definition of friend is “not an enemy.” Although this can be true, there is much more to what a friend is. An enemy is a person who feels hatred towards or harms someone. So, because someone does not hate you, does that automatically mean that they are a friend? No, because friends have to have a special affectionate connection. You can’t buy friends. You can’t create friends on a website. You have to go out and connect with people to make friends. How many of the hundreds of “friends” on your social media are actually friends? They don’t hate you, so do you consider all of them friends? The word friend stems from the German word freund, which means “to love.” What people today think is that anyone they have a conversation with is their friend. You have to ask yourself though, do I love this person? If this person disappeared from my life forever, how would I be affected and could I move on? If it was the other way around, would they miss me? Is this person actually my friend? My teaching is influenced by my coaching and my coaching is influenced by my teaching. I hold very high expectations for my students but also hold high expectations for myself. I can't wait to hear what my students say when I ask them whether they feel like the class has been tuned to them: chances are I will learn a lot from what they tell me. By Elise Isakov, inspired by an excerpt from Harriet Tubman: Conductor on The Underground Railroad by Ann Petry
Five days later they realized that any signs of civilization were dwindling down to nothing. They saw the outskirts of the vast woods, and knew that they were reaching the uncharted part of the region. Occasionally they would glance at each other to calm their racing pulses, sometimes would whisper quietly amongst themselves, and then they knew that for the moment they were safe and unharmed. |
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May 2019
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